The place was murky as only a pool hall can be--stale cigarettes cut by the acrid metallic reek of poppers. The taint of the damn things caught in Joe's throat and made his head pound. He hated them and his boy didn't need them. The honest smell of sweaty men was almost lost under the funk of sex laced with everyone's favorite poison.
The latest metal hit blasted out of the sound system loud enough to cover casual conversation, Def Leppard singing about getting rocked.
If Joe had his way, the whole bar would get rocked by what was about to go down.
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And now, I want to know what's that going to be.
ReplyDeleteA night of sex and dirty pool. Joe’s going to sink some balls, hopefully his boy's ready to back his bets.
ReplyDeleteGreat scene-setting -- reminds me of a bar I worked in briefly.
ReplyDeleteThank you! I tried to make it as much like the pool halls I'd been in back in college.
DeleteGreat snippet, I felt like I was there in the bar.
ReplyDeleteThank you!
Deleteand now i really want to know whats about to go down!
ReplyDeleteHehehe...
DeleteGood description! I got a twinge of sympathetic headache just imagining the smell of the place.
ReplyDeleteI'm told poppers give you a headache. They weren't around when I was going clubbing.
DeleteVery descriptive! Can almost see the smoke swirling and smell the spit and sawdust :D Love the way this is setting the scene and I wonder if it will go down as expected, or if the rocking might be rolling them right out the door. Groan, that was bad wasn't it :D
ReplyDelete{Snicker!}
DeleteI'm pretty sure something goes down.
Great atmosphere!
ReplyDeleteThis is such a great story Kayla! Hope to see more of these guys soon. :)
ReplyDeleteThere might be more, but unfortunately it won't be soon. I have several projects I'm working on and I would need my beta reader to help me co-author anything more.
DeletePS - I'm trying to twist her arm!
Wow, strong emotions indeed :)
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